My story. "Preview"

#0 - March 31, 2009, 7:43 p.m.
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Hey, guys. I have just written a story based on world of warcraft. (Obviously). Anyway. It has taken me one and a half years to complete it. Today, I've finally finished and i would love to share a bit of it with you so here is a paragraph from page 2.

A home within.
“Preview”


"...Sprinting, weeping. He had no choice but to surrender. “Filthy maggot, get off your knees!” Shouted the outraged Stormwind patrol guard. The Forsaken Scout leaped to his blade after dropping it when dazed by a guard. Quickly dashing in the air past the guard with his last bit of strength, brutally slicing the unfortunate guards’ legs off. “Ahhh!” Screamed the Human. The Scout dragged the legs many yards away from the scene, leaving a trail of blood behind. It was not long before he had to make an escape. “This meat is so, juicy.” Said the Scout. Leaning against the rotten bark of a willow tree, making a quick recovery. “There he is! Over there river!” Yelled a Stormwind guard. As the forsaken peered around the branches, it became clear there was more that twenty men charging at him from all directions. “Just do what master taught us to do in this kind of situation” Thought the Scout. Taking deep breaths as he was clearing his mind, focusing all energy into his legs and body. Large amounts of purple static appeared around the Scout, becoming more and more prepared to make his move. “What!? Where did that scum go!?” Shouted a Stormwind guard as they lost sight of the Forsaken."

Created by Moonpig.


If you liked this scene please let me know. It would be lovley to get some good feedback!

(This is based for children - teens) I think people should take it easy on my work. I do not need to be instulted if you dont like this.


-Best wishes.

Moonpig.
#146 - April 3, 2009, 8:37 p.m.
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This thread it has turned into a nasty little flamefest and the discussion has derailed pretty badly. I am therefore locking the thread and removing some of the worst posts.

To the OP: Please feel free to create a new thread, as I am sure you would like some discussion and continued feedback on your story.

To the rest who participated in the flamefest in this thread: Please respect the forum rules and keep a civil tone when posting on these forums. If what you have to say is not on topic or is simply not benefiting the discussion in any way whatsoever, then please refrain from posting. Being obnoxious, provocative, insulting or abusive will not be tolerated, so please think twice before you hit the 'Reply' button.